well, of course there are mistakes, but I see a few good points of it. I see that u are careful with third person (she and u add s :) ) I think you should read something in English... book would be best. Then you'll remember few things, just. and just be careful of using a good form of words: from your post above. I think it's critisize not critic :)
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Date: 2011-04-09 06:34 pm (UTC)I think you should read something in English... book would be best. Then you'll remember few things, just. and just be careful of using a good form of words: from your post above. I think it's critisize not critic :)